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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 26, 2009 16:51:38 GMT -5
Warzone: VirusBack-storyA few years ago, tow doctors was working on a project to cure the infected it was a big success. A few years later after the cursed the infect a bigger virus came along that was killing people within a few days people missing and people dying there was not a lot of time for these two scientist they had to come up with a cure and the project failed one scientist was found dead the next morning and the other one disappeared. The Virus is spreading and something crazy is going on explosions everywhere it’s not a good sign I think this place will need some fucking help.
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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 26, 2009 16:52:42 GMT -5
Main Characters Wayne (JX) (Micro coming soon) Josh (Hurricane) (Micro coming soon) Gavin (Gavscsa) (Micro coming soon) Randall (AC) (Micro coming soon) Chris (CMC) (Micro coming soon)
Other Characters Sergeant Nuke Captain Price Air Force Captain Grace News Reporter Officer Grant
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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 26, 2009 16:54:36 GMT -5
Warzone Act1: Virus engages USA, Army Camp, It is getting dark and all of the soldiers are putting all of the equipment away ready to head off to sleep because they have been training all day and it is time for some rest, The army camp alarm goes off, all of the soldiers run towards the equipment bombs going off, soldiers are dying bodies flying around best part of soldiers get the weapons and start passing them around it goes all quiet then they see a big red flash go up in to the air and explode like a firework, then loads of parts start falling to the floor exploding all of the solders take cover in bunkers and sand bags, then it stops they all look up over the bunkers and sand bags and see a big gust of smoke in front of them and they seen shadows walking towards them the sergeant shouts ‘FIRE!’ all of the solders start shooting their guns towards them they have no idea what the hell is going on and then the smoke disappears and see robot humans running towards them with weapons moulded into them the sergeant should for the tanks and machine guns to come though to help them, the battle goes on for awhile and then the sergeant has enough and sends some air strikes this is a word of sacrifice. Sergeant Nuke: Ok solders I have had enough of all this shit time to call in the fucking air strike!!! Captain Price: Sergeant, are you fucking crazy? There is a chance we will die! Sergeant Nuke: Well Captain it is a chance to take! Now call in that freakin air strike! Captain Price: Fair enough sir, come on air force, come in, can you hear me? Air force Captain Grace: Yes I hear you, come in what is your location? Captain Price: Thank god, we are in the Army Camp, north east please send a air strike, come in. Air Force Captain Grace: Ok on our way do you want a pick up go get out of there, come in? Captain Price: Sergeant, do you want a pick up go get us the fuck out of here? Sergeant Nuke: Go for it captain! Air Force Captain Grace: Ok they are on their way hold them back for 10 minutes the squad won’t take long! Captain Price: Ok Sergeant they are on the way we have to hold them back! Sergeant Nuke: Ok give them all we fucking have! All of the solders get up and start walking towards the robot humans in a big line and also row by row shooting the hell out of them, robots dying and also along with the soldiers they kept them held back for 10 minutes then the choppers came landed at the far side of the battle field, Sergeant Nuke: Ok soldiers give them all you have and run towards the fucking choppers it’s the only change we have! Captain Price: Hurry! We only have 4 minutes before strike! They ran as fast as they could to get to the chopper some people made it and some people failed most solders was on board the choppers began to take off and the air strike flying above the choppers dropping bombs to destroy the robo-hummans.
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Post by yoshiesdomain on Jul 26, 2009 17:00:15 GMT -5
It was a little confusing. You picked something that could be taken into numerous original ways, but I think you don't know what you want to do. It seems as though the story is second place and isn't developing yet, just action and robots. Try to make the storyline lead somewhere and make the readers want to find out what happens, because the end of this just makes it look like robots are gonna fight with them again. Not bad, but needs work on the story-side.
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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 26, 2009 17:15:39 GMT -5
Warzone Act2: Robot Humans! After the horrid battle in the USA Army Camp it went all over the news, millions of people where watching it on the television. News reporter: There was a big battle last night in the big USA Army camp, north east some of the survivors interview us when they got back what happened and what they seemed to be, here is a interview of Sergeant Nuke, Sergeant Nuke: Well we didn’t expect this to happen it was one terrible shock, we all heard the alarms go off and bombs going off until we go out of the camp bases, there was a big flashing red light in the distance and then they hit to the floor like meteors that’s all so I told the commend to fire at will and as the smoke disappeared they looked like robot flash humans. News Reporter: That sounds like it was on tough battle you had, Sergeant Nuke: Yes it was but we all had enough so I told Captain Price to call in a pickup and also to call in a Air Strike to give us some time to get out of there. News Reporter: Now that’s sounds like great action but I have to say I would not to be in your boots right now well Sergeant nice to have you hear I’ll let you get back to your work... Wayne walks in to the room where Josh, Gavin, Chris and Randall are sitting watching the TV, Wayne: Hey guys I just bought a newspaper on my way back from work! Josh: Shut up man I’m trying to watch the news! Gavin: Yeah me to. Chris: Well I just got out the shower so I have no idea what the fuck is going on. Randall: yeah I had my ear phone in... Wayne: Randall? Is that my IPod? Randall: Yes, wait...I mean no! Wayne: Give it back! Randall: No you can’t have it! I’m using it bitch! Josh: Guys calm the fuck down watch this something has just went crazy at the USA Army Cap and it sounds like bad shit. Gavin: Yeah it sounds like some crazy mother fucking robot humans are trying to kill everyone! Woo how fucking scar is that. Chris: Not that scary Wayne: Yeah it’s probably just some new movie what is coming out or some shit like that. Josh: Yeah like something like this with real interviews and clips being shown? Good one, stupid, hold on, give me your newspaper. Wayne heads towards the table, and is about to pick up the news paper and the power gets cut out.... Chris: What the fuck! Wayne: Power cut? Josh: No shit Gavin: well its dark how are we meant to read the freaking paper now? Randall: Use the candles in the kitchen part. Chris: Yeah that’s a good idea hold on I’ll just go and get them. Chris goes into the kitchen and gets the candles and gives them to Wayne to light up. Josh: Ok now bring it here so I can read the paper. Gavin: Turn to the back I want to see the soccer score. Josh: Ok hold on...wait what no I’m looking for something! Gavin: It was worth a try. Josh: Yes but it didn’t Gavin: Wait what does that say? Josh: It says, Scientist are working on a new armour to be compatible fighting with the robot humans they need 4 students to test them out and also use them to help the USA and British army to fight the unknown Robot, Humans! Wayne: You guys thinking what I’m thinking? Josh: It says they will get millions of pounds if they survive! Everyone: LET’S DO THIS Mother fucker! Randall: but first I need a shit.
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Post by yoshiesdomain on Jul 27, 2009 5:28:36 GMT -5
I really did like how you opened the second with a totally different perspective and as a news report. Good job there. Better than your first ep, more interesting!
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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 27, 2009 17:22:24 GMT -5
Warzone Act1: In The End The next day, after everyone had watched the News and also read the paper they had to wake up early to head off to the army camp to have training to test out and use the cyber armour to go against the unknown robot humans, Josh wakes up about 6 in the morning, he goes around walking the others up but he noticed that Wayne was not in his bed, so he looks around and he sees him on the balcony having a tab and a drink of water, josh heads out and see what was up. Josh: Hey Wayne what’s up man? Wayne: Hey, nothing really just thinking. Josh: Thinking about what? Wayne: What will happen if we get to use the armour and then we start fighting in the war, we will miss friends and family? Josh: That is really true man, but just think if we survive look at all of that money we will have in our back pocket. Wayne: Yeah that is true. Josh: and also come to think of it, we are saving hundreds of people’s lives, Wayne: Yeah, why are we talking? Let’s wake the others up and ready to go and get some freakin money and also to kick some freakin arse! Wayne and Josh got into the apartment to wake the others up Wayne puts water over Chris, Josh puts a sock in Randall’s face and Wayne and Josh wake Gavin up by putting speakers next to his ear and playing loud music, they all have a cup of tea and some breakfast at half 6 in the morning they have to be at the camp at 12, they all get changed in the bathroom and kitchen one by one while some people went into the shower once they were all ready they got the stuff ready and loaded the car up ready to head off. It was half 8 and they got to the car and headed down towards the USA, Army Camp ready for the training and learning to begin. It took them 3 hours to get to the USA Army Camp, They stopped go get some fuel and some food and went back on the road they are about 10 minutes away from the camp, Wayne: So what do you guys think this will be like? Chris: annoying? Josh: Yeah maybe but I guess we will have to wait and see Gavin: Well you guys know me; I just want to get it over and done with.... Randall: Yeah I agree I’m too lazy, I cannot be arsed with the running and what-knot. Wayne: Well guys it looks like this is let’s go in and meet people or whatever the fuck they do. Randall parks the car up and everyone gets out of the Car and gets all of the things out of the boot and heads towards the Camp ready to find out where about they are sleeping and what they have to do. They walk towards the gate to enter the USA Army camp, Officer Grant: yes how may I help you? Wayne: Yes we seen something in the newspaper about testing out some new cyber armour to battle against the unknown? Officer Grant: Yeah sure once you enter this gate you only have one chance to turn around and leave, I may warn you it will be on tough mother fucker. Wayne: Yeah we know, we are all up for this challenge
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