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Post by yoshiesdomain on Jul 8, 2009 6:39:26 GMT -5
Which is also wrong. It's "Ostrich".
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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 8, 2009 16:06:44 GMT -5
Google never lies.
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Post by CMC on Jul 8, 2009 18:25:52 GMT -5
Chapter 2 _______________________________________________________________________________
Orlando Florida, USA
Back at a hotel on international drive, the seven survivors try to get rooms for the time being before getting home. Wayne and Chris are talking to the two twins (Samantha and Sarah) who followed them off of the plane, whilst Gavin, Matt and Josh are talking to the workers at the check in desk.
Sarah: What happened?
Chris: I saw it happen.
Samantha: But how?
Chris: I just fucking saw it! OK?
Chris turns to look out the window as Sarah joins the others at the check in counter.
Wayne: I’m starving, we need to get some food.
Samantha: They’re now seeing where there is to get food.
Josh comes back from the counter and explains where there are some restaurants nearby, they leave to go get food.
Chris: I don’t know what happened, I just.... Saw it.
Wayne: It was probably a coincidence, that shit doesn’t happen.
As all 7 of them walk past a diner, the wind picks up and a snap is heard, the cable of the neon sign breaks in half as the logo comes flying down towards the seven. Chris, Matt, Josh and Gavin move, but Wayne, Samantha and Sarah are left standing there.
Matt: Move out of the fucking way!
Just before it reaches them, Wayne dives out of the way, leaving Sarah and Samantha in line to be crushed.
Matt: Fucking Mo......
Blood covers the windows of the diner as Sarah and Samantha are impaled by the “I” in diner. The 5 guys are left laying on the pavement, as the girls are left dead in the road.
Josh: We’ve got to go.
Gavin: What? We can’t just leave...
Josh: Yesterday, Chris predicted a fucking plane blowing up. Now, Sam and Sarah are killed with us around them, we have to get out of here.
All 5 flee the scene as sirens pollute the air. They chase back to the hotel and all cram into one room.
Wayne: What the fuck is happening? You swear you know fuck all?
Chris: What would I know, you think I am planning all of this?
Gavin: Guys, look.
They all look at the TV screen as the news comes on. A local station is reporting on Flight 180, the anniversary of the crash. And how it compares to the one just passed.
Gavin: What flight number were we?
Chris: I don’t know, 100? 120?
Gavin reads the reaming stub of the ticket.
Gavin: ....180.
Chris frantically searches for his laptop, after finding it, he places it on the end of the bed, waiting for it to load.
He finds a local news station reporting the same as the television, before finding other news sites reporting deeper. Chris reads what the site reports.
Chris: “Nine years ago, students were travelling to France, when one had a premonition of a crash. A group of them got off before the plane eventually ended up exploding on takeoff...”
Wayne: Yeah? We know that, it has been all over the news idiot.
Chris: Dude, shut the fuck up, it then says. “Over the next months, the passengers who got off died in freak accidents. It was later revealed, the order of death, was near to the same as there seating order, and when they would have died in the explosion. Only the differences being a few were swapped.”
Gav: So what are you saying? That is happening to us, you’re looking into it way too much.
Chris: But if I’m not? I had a premonition, the same as then, people got off, the same as then, the plane blew up the same as then, and then there are people dying in freak accidents, the same as then! It could happen.
Josh: But Wayne was at the front, so Wayne would have died first.
Chris: I don’t know, Matt, me and you were two rows back, who was in front of us.
Matt tries to remember before suddenly realising who it was.
Matt: There was a kid, the one who squirted Wayne with his water, and then....Sam and Sarah.
They all come to terms with what is happening, and that it could be the same as what went on.
Wayne: It skipped me? That means I’m done! It can’t come back, I cheated death, it is over for me!
Josh: So by that logic, one of you are next?
Matt: This is ridiculous, it is pure speculation, and your acting like idiots!
Matt gets up, and leaves the room. Leaving the others to think over what has gone on.
They end up falling asleep in the room, and when they wake up in the morning, realise that Matt hasn’t come back.
Wayne: He’s not back?
Chris: Guys, he’s dead.
Wayne: What? How the fuck do you know that?
Chris: Look...
They look at the television set, the news is reporting the death of a young tourist.
News Reporter: We have just received news that a tourist has been found dead at a construction site, if you are feint hearted, turn this off now as there are some gory details in this story.
When local construction work, Jack Orton went to his site this morning, the aftermath was seen with the body, in a cement mixer. Police have gone through CCTV footage and have come out with the story.
The tourist has been identified as Matthew Hudson, by his passport which was found on the floor in the site. It showed him at 4 am walking past the site as a cinder block falls from the scaffolding. It narrowly misses him as he turns around to look at the broken block on the floor. He then turns back and is impaled by a swinging metal rod that falls from the same scaffolding. It was a attached to a rope and it had not been secured when it was left overnight. The rod swung, and drove through the chest of Hudson; he was then swung back into the cement mixer. Police were called to the site this morning to find his corpse inside the mixer surrounded by cement.
Chris: It’s true, it's fucking true!..... I’m next. _______________________________________________________________________________
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Post by Gavska on Jul 8, 2009 18:34:49 GMT -5
Great stuff. Some gruesome deaths but I'd like to see just a little more originality. I know it's based on FD but it's as if I'm reading the movie script at times. Never-the-less it's very intriguing and will be cool to read how the other survivors pop their clogs.
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Post by yoshiesdomain on Jul 8, 2009 23:22:41 GMT -5
Thats really awesome! MJH died first!
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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 9, 2009 5:13:48 GMT -5
Muahahaa awesome work CMC I can not wait for the next chapter becuase it is juste pure sex.
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Post by CMC on Jul 9, 2009 21:43:22 GMT -5
Chapter 3 _______________________________________________________________________________
Orlando Florida, USA
Chris, Gavin and Josh are all back at the hotel after finding out about the death of Matt at the construction site.
Josh: So, Wayne was skipped, it then went onto Sam and Sarah, then to Matt. That means it is you next, right?
Chris: ....
Josh: Right?
Chris: I know what it fucking means, okay?!
Gavin gets a phone call from Wayne who says he is at the train station, and tells them to come meet him there.
Josh grabs a drink before the 4 walk to the train station, and meet Wayne.
Wayne: Took your fucking time didn’t you.
Chris: Dude, what is it? Why did you call us here?
Wayne: There is a train, to another airport, if you want to, we can go home.
Chris: Get on another plane? Fuck that.
Josh: Dude, we have to find out what is happening before we leave.
Josh walks towards the bin as he throws his half full bottle of cola towards it, making it rebound off of the rim. It lands on the ground next to the wire leading to the electronic clock.
As they continue to talk, the liquid starts to touch the wire, and make its way across the ground to Chris’ feet.
Gav Spots it before its impact.
Gavin: Chris, move.
Chris: What?
Gavin: Move!
Gavin grabs Chris and pulls him out of the way so that the liquid doesn’t connect with his body, before Josh tries to run past it as well. As he moves he catches the cable on his leg and falls into the cola sending the current through his body.
Gav unplugs the cable quickly before further damage is done.
They help Josh back up to his feet as they look up to see the electronic clock hanging on by a thread. They all move out of the way but Josh is left standing. The chord snaps and the clock comes crashing down painting the walls with blood and flesh from Josh’s head.
Chris: What the fuck?! It was supposed to be me!
Gavin: It skipped you.
Chris: How?
Gavin: You don’t beat death, you cheat it, I pulled you out of the way, it skipped you. That meant Josh was next, and he was, we didn’t save him.
Medical Staff and security crowded round them to take away the remains of Josh’s body. As the others once again flee the scene of the death.
They run away from the train station and end up in a hotel on International Drive.
Gavin: This is crazy, what the hell’s going on?!
Wayne: I don’t care, it skipped me, it’s over, I was the first to be skipped.
They walk through the hotel lobby as they pass two historic machetes that are fixed to the wall.
Wayne: They're fucking bigger than me!
Gavin: Stop pissing around, we need to find out how to stop this.
Wayne: Pissing around? I’m alive, I’m never going to die, never! Death cant fuck with me, I will never die!
As they are standing underneath the machetes, the knives come lose and swing down.
Chris: Move!
Gavin ducks out of the way as it narrowly misses him. Wayne isn’t quick enough, the machetes slices through his waist separating his body in two as blood flies everywhere.
Chris and Gavin are left lying on the floor in the emptylobby as no one else seems to come.
Chris: It will come back.
Gavin: How do you know?
Chris: Wayne cheated death, the girls died. Then Matt died. I cheated it, and it took Josh. Then you cheated it. That was it. That was all seven of us, but it came back. It took Wayne, its going through us again, and it won’t stop until we’re gone too. _______________________________________________________________________________
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Post by Gavska on Jul 9, 2009 21:48:58 GMT -5
This has been a great read so far. You paint the scenes well and I can't wait for the rest.
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Post by CMC on Jul 9, 2009 22:02:29 GMT -5
Thanks for all the comment guys.
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Post by Breaking Waynejamin™ on Jul 10, 2009 7:52:13 GMT -5
Awesome! and it seems i'm dead how sad... nice story so far i enjoy reading it man.
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Post by yoshiesdomain on Jul 11, 2009 20:05:48 GMT -5
Fuck yes! I got splattered!
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Post by CMC on Jul 26, 2009 21:00:31 GMT -5
Chapter 4
Orlando Florida, USA
Gavin and Chris are walking down International Drive discussing the on goings.
Chris: It wasn’t supposed to be like this dude. I should have stayed on the plane.
Gavin: You saved 7 lives that night, you did the right thing, they were going to die anyway, we were going to die anyway, this has given us longer.
Chris: We can’t beat it, we’re going to die, we can’t play God.
Gavin: But we can cheat it, we can live longer, we just have to look over our shoulders.
Chris: Look over our shoulders? Every second? Fuck that dude, we can’t do it.
As they walk down the street, Chris looks in the window, and sees his reflection, only to see a car hurtling down the street behind them. He spins around and sees the car fly into the traffic light post, as it falls to the ground, it is stopped by telephone cables.
Chris: Fuck Dude.
Gavin turned round to head away from the wreckage, as he does this he slips on the ground falling onto his back, he remains unharmed, and rises to is feet.
Gavin: Close call eh?
Chris: Yeah
Chris turns around and goes to cross the street only to be wiped out by a passing car, blood splatters everywhere as Gavin, the only survivor, looks on.
Gavin: Wha? What now?
Gavin stands there covered in crimson liquid, he looks up to see the traffic lights still supported by the cables, all of a sudden they snap, leaving Gavin little time to escape, it crushes him leaving a pool of blood and intestines splattered across the pavement.
Time passes.
Gavin: Chris? Chris?!
Chris wakes up, from this second premonition.
Gavin: You spaced out.
Chris: We have to go!
Chris backs up.
Chris: Were dead, were fucking dead!
He backs into the road in hysterics and is hit by the same car from his premonition, in exactly the same way, a sea of crimson flying across the air.
Gavin looks up only to see what Chris has already witnessed.
Gavin: Oh shi...... _______________________________________________________________________________
Well, that is this one over with, completely forgot about doing the last chapter, so there it is.
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